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The table above shows data on the demographics of four nations Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The table above shows data on the demographics of four nations
The table gives information about the demographics of four countries (China, Russia, America, and Britain), included statistics of population, GDP per capita and average life expectancy. GDP is measured by the US dollars. Overall, China had the highest population on four nations, while its GDP was the lowest figure. UK population was the lowest figure, but its life expectancy was the longest length. China, had the population of 1, 357, 000, 000 people, was the country had the most people on country, but its GDP was the lowest money, 6, 807 $USD per person. In contrast, USA had just 318, 875, 000 people, was the second crowded country, but it also was the richest nation, 53, 681 $USD per capita. Russia was the third crowded country, followed by UK, 143, 986, 000 people and 64, 937, 000 people, respectively. With the least people in country, UK’s life expectancy was the longest length with average 81. 5 years. However, the American were the richest people but their life’s length was about 69. 2 years, the shortest length. The Chinese had life expectancy longer than the Russian, 75. 2 years and 72. 3 years, respectively.
The table gives information about the demographics of four
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countries
(China, Russia, America, and Britain), included statistics of
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population
, GDP per capita and average
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life
expectancy. GDP
is measured
by the US dollars.

Overall
, China had the highest
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population
on four nations, while its GDP was the lowest figure. UK
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population
was the lowest figure,
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but
its
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life
expectancy was the longest length.

China, had the
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population
of 1, 357, 000, 000
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people
, was the
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country
had the most
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people
on
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country
,
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but
its GDP was the lowest money, 6,
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807 $
USD per person.
In contrast
, USA had
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318, 875, 000
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people
, was the second crowded
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country
,
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it
also
was the richest nation, 53,
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681 $
USD per capita. Russia was the third crowded
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country
, followed by UK, 143, 986, 000
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people
and 64, 937, 000
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people
,
respectively
.

With the least
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people
in
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country
, UK’s
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life
expectancy was the longest length with average 81. 5 years.
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, the American were the richest
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people
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their
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life’s
length was about 69. 2 years, the shortest length. The Chinese had
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life
expectancy longer than the Russian, 75. 2 years and 72. 3 years,
respectively
.
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IELTS academic The table above shows data on the demographics of four nations

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193 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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