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The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990. v.2

The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990. v. 2
The given bar charts compare the educational involvements of students in terms of total years of education and their participation in science-related subjects and study in developing and industrialised countries from 1980 to 1990. According to the first bar graph, the average years of schooling in developing countries was only about 2 while this was over 8 years in industrialised countries in 1980. After ten years the number of year in school on an average increased both in the developing and industrialised countries reaching just over 3 years in developing countries while over 10 years in developed countries. According to the second graph, the number of Scientist and Technician was much higher in developed countries than the developing countries. The percentage of Scientist and Technician in developing countries both in 1980 and 1990 was below 20 while this was around 50 on an average in developed countries. Finally, the third graph represents that the amount spent on Research and Development in industrially developed countries was much higher than the spending in developing countries. In 1980 the spending was around 50 billion US dollar in developing countries while this amount was more than 150 billion US dollar in developed countries. Interestingly, after 10 years the spending in Research & Development in developed countries was doubled while that amount decreased almost by 50% in developing countries.
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bar charts compare the educational involvements of students in terms of total years of education and their participation in science-related subjects and study in
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developing
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industrialised
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from 1980 to 1990.

According to the
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developing
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was
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in 1980. After ten years the number of
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year
in school on an average increased both in the
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developing
and
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industrialised
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countries
reaching
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over 3 years in
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developing
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while over 10 years in
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developed
countries.

According to the second graph, the number of Scientist and Technician was much higher in
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developed
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than the
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developing
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. The percentage of Scientist and Technician in
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developing
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both in 1980 and 1990 was below 20 while this was around 50 on an average in
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developed
countries.

Finally
, the third graph represents that the amount spent on Research and Development in
industrially
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developed
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countries
was much higher than the spending in
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developing
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countries
. In 1980 the spending was around 50 billion US dollar in
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developing
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countries
while this amount was more than 150 billion US dollar in
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developed
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.
Interestingly
, after 10 years the spending in Research & Development in
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developed
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was doubled
while that amount decreased almost by 50% in
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.
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IELTS academic The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990. v. 2

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