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The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990. v.3

The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990. v. 3
The given bar graphs compare the educational involvements of students in term of total years of education and their participation in science-related subjects in developing and industrial countries from the year 1980 to 1990. As is presented in the first bar graph, average years of schooling in developing countries were approximately 2 years while in industrial countries schooling years were over 8 years in 1980. Interestingly after one decade schooling years in developing countries magnified to over 3 years while it surged to over 10 years in industrial countries. As is observed from the second bar graph, the number of scientists and technicians were much higher in industrial countries than in developing countries. Percentage of scientists and technicians were less than 20 percent in developing countries from 1980 to 1990 while it was just over 40 percent in 1980 which soared to approximately 70 percent in 1990. According to the third bar graph, it can be seen clearly, spending on research and development in industrial countries was far higher than developing countries. The spending in 1980 in developing countries was around 50 billion US dollars while it was 150 billion dollars in industrial countries. Ultimately, after a decade spending on research and development slumped significantly almost 50 percent while spending in industrial countries peaked to approximately 350 billion US dollars respectively.
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compare the educational involvements of students in term of total years of education and their participation in science-related subjects in
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developing
and
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industrial
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from the
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1980 to 1990.

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, average years of schooling in
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developing
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were approximately 2 years while in
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industrial
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schooling years were
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8 years in 1980.
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after one decade schooling years in
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developing
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magnified to
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3 years while it surged to
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10 years in
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countries.

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, the number of scientists and technicians were much higher in
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industrial
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than in
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developing
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. Percentage of scientists and technicians were less than 20
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in
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developing
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from 1980 to 1990 while it was
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40
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in 1980 which soared to approximately 70
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in 1990.

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was far higher than
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. The
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in 1980 in
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was around 50 billion US dollars while it was 150 billion dollars in
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.
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on research and development slumped
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almost 50
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peaked to approximately 350 billion US dollars
respectively
.
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Language is not a genetic gift, it is a social gift. Learning a new language is becoming a member of the club – the community of speakers of that language.
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IELTS academic The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990. v. 3

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