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The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters traveling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030. v.2

The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters traveling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030. v. 2
The line chart illustrates the average numbers of British passengers who travel every day by automobile, bus, or train between the years 1970 and 2030. Measured in million In general, it can be observed that the using of cars and train increase along the given period, while the users of bus declines at the end of the period. Beginning with cars, it can be seen that, 5 million English passengers used cars for 10 years (1970-1980) to move between areas. In 2000 the number rose significantly to approximately 7 million. Then remain stable until 2010. The expectation for the number of commuters will be increased to around 8 million and 9 million in 2020, and 2030 respectively. Moving to use of train, the number of commuters was around 2 million in 1970, then increased gradually to 3 million in 2000. The number remained the same until 2010. While the prediction of traveled passengers by train will jump rapidly to 5 million, which is less than using cars. Finally, it can be witnessed, more people using the bus in their transportation in 1970, around 4 million, whereas the number will be decreased slowly to 3 million in 2030, which the lowest mean transportation in 2030 by UK passengers.
The line chart illustrates the average
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of British
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passengers
who travel every day by automobile, bus, or
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train
between the years 1970 and 2030. Measured in
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million


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be observed
that the using of cars and
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train
increase along the
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given
period, while the users of bus declines at the
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end
of the period.

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seen
that, 5
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million
English
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passengers
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used
cars for 10 years (1970-1980) to
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move
between areas. In 2000 the
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number
rose
significantly
to approximately 7
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million
. Then remain stable until 2010. The expectation for the
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number
of commuters will
be increased
to around 8
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million
and 9
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million
in 2020, and 2030
respectively
.

Moving to
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use
of
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train
, the
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number
of commuters was around 2
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million
in 1970, then increased
gradually
to 3
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million
in 2000. The
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number
remained the same until 2010. While the prediction of traveled
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passengers
by
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train
will jump
rapidly
to 5
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million
, which is less than using cars.

Finally
, it can
be witnessed
, more
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people
using the bus in their transportation in 1970, around 4
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million
, whereas the
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number
will
be decreased
slowly
to 3
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million
in 2030, which the lowest mean transportation in 2030 by UK
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passengers
.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters traveling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030. v. 2

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