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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015 v.5

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015 v. 5
The given bar graph gives information about exporting five types of products between 2015 and 2016. While the table illustrates the proportion of change in values for every type of exports compared to 2015. In general, the initial impression from graph is the export earnings for petroleum products increased comparing with 2015. In contrast, the export earnings for gems and jewellery declined if compared with 2015. In addition, the change rate in values went up except for gems and jewellery between two given years. The value for petroleum products was a little above 60 million dollars then grew up slightly to around 65 $ million. For engineered goods, the value increased by 5 million dollars between 2015 and 2016. While the pattern changed for gems and jewellery, it went down to 40 million from 44 million between 2015 and 2016. Turning to table, it can be seen that the change per cent went up 3%. Whilst the gems and jewellery decreased by 5. 18%. the highest changing rate happened in textiles products, it increased by 15. 24%.
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bar graph gives information about exporting five types of
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between 2015 and 2016. While the table illustrates the proportion of
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change
in values for every type of exports compared to 2015.

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, the initial impression from graph is the export earnings for petroleum
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products
increased comparing with 2015.
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, the export earnings for
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gems
and
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jewellery
declined if compared with 2015.
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In
addition, the
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rate in values went up
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except for
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gems
and
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jewellery
between two
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years.

The
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value
for petroleum
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products
was a
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above 60
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million
dollars then grew up
slightly
to around
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65 $
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million
. For engineered
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goods
, the
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increased by 5
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million
dollars between 2015 and 2016. While the pattern
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changed
for
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gems
and
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jewellery
, it went down to 40
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from 44
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million
between 2015 and 2016. Turning to table, it can be
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seen
that the
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per cent went up 3%. Whilst the
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gems
and
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jewellery
decreased by 5. 18%.
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the
highest changing rate happened in textiles
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products
, it increased by 15. 24%.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015 v. 5

Academic
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3 paragraphs
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6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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