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The chart below shows the sleep patterns of people in five different occupations according to a Canadian study. v.2

The chart below shows the sleep patterns of people in five different occupations according to a Canadian study. v. 2
The diagram outlines the sleep pattern of students, truck drivers, mothers, business executives and doctors in a typical day. Generally speaking, students and business executives have a steady sleep pattern while others sleep in a scattered fashion. It is explicitly observed that students usually sleep 8 hours a day, from 11. 00 pm to 7. 00 am, without any interruption and their duration of rest is higher than people from other professions. Business executives have a continuous nap schedule but they sleep only 6 hours, from 11 pm to 5 pm. Truck drivers seem like have the most sporadic sleep schedule and they sleep 6 hours a day in a scattered way in the early morning and evening time. A similar rest agenda could be observed for full-time mothers who take rest 8 hours a day but at three different times of the day. They are usually awake at mid-night as do the truck drivers. Finally, doctors sleep only 5 hours a day, the least among the given categories, and they sleep from late night till early morning with the exception of 3-4 in the morning when they remain awake.
The diagram outlines the
sleep
pattern of students, truck drivers, mothers, business executives and doctors in a typical day.
Generally
speaking, students and business executives have a steady
sleep
pattern while others
sleep
in a scattered fashion
.

It is
explicitly
observed that students
usually
sleep
8
hours
a day, from 11. 00 pm to 7. 00 am, without any interruption and their duration of rest is higher than
people
from other professions. Business executives have a continuous nap schedule
but
they
sleep
only
6
hours
, from 11 pm to 5 pm. Truck drivers seem like have the most sporadic
sleep
schedule and
they
sleep
6
hours
a day
in a scattered way
in the early morning and evening time. A similar rest agenda could
be observed
for full-time mothers who take rest 8
hours
a day
but
at three
different
times of the day. They are
usually
awake at mid-night as do the truck drivers.
Finally
, doctors
sleep
only
5
hours
a day, the least among the
given
categories, and they
sleep
from late night till early morning
with the exception of
3-4 in the morning when they remain awake.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS academic The chart below shows the sleep patterns of people in five different occupations according to a Canadian study. v. 2

Academic
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2 paragraphs
190 words
5.5
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