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The graph below shows how prices of 'high-tech gadgets' changed over time in Somecountry. v.2

The graph below shows how prices of 'high-tech gadgets' changed over time in Somecountry. v. 2
The given graph gives information about the changes of the prices regarding the high-tech devices (Navigation systems and Smart phones) in Somecountry during two years and a half (from the second part of 2004 to the end of 2006). The units are measured in US dollars. Overall, the both gadgets followed almost the same pattern only about 1000 dollars apart. Specifically, the highest price of both occured in the second half of 2004, while the lowest price was in 2006, where both of them met. In terms of the Navigation systems, it reached a peak of just below $4000 in 2004 and thereafter declined throughout 2005 with prices considerably more than $3000. At the turn of 2005 there was a moderate rise to almost $3500 but at that point it repeatedly decreased to its final bottom of well under 3000 dollars in the last year of the time span. On the other hand, the prices of smart phones in the initial year were considerably lower (just above $3000) and then slightly decreased to approximately $2800 in the first half of 2005. During the year there was a negligible increase to almost $3000, but then it dropped again in the first half of 2006 (just above $2500) and remained stable until the end of the year.
The
given
graph gives information about the
changes
of the
prices
regarding the high-tech devices (Navigation systems and Smart phones) in
Somecountry
during two years and a
half
(from the second part of 2004 to the
end
of 2006). The units
are measured
in US dollars.

Overall
, the both gadgets followed almost the same pattern
only
about 1000 dollars apart.
Specifically
, the highest
price
of both
occured
in the second
half
of 2004, while the lowest
price
was in 2006, where both of them met.

In terms of the Navigation systems, it reached a peak of
just
below $4000 in 2004 and thereafter declined throughout 2005 with
prices
considerably
more than $3000. At the turn of 2005 there was a moderate rise to almost $3500
but
at that point it
repeatedly
decreased to its final bottom of well under 3000 dollars in the last
year
of the time span.

On the other hand
, the
prices
of smart phones in the initial
year
were
considerably
lower (
just
above $3000) and then
slightly
decreased to approximately $2800 in the
first
half
of 2005. During the
year
there was a negligible increase to almost $3000,
but
then it dropped again in the
first
half
of 2006 (
just
above $2500) and remained stable until the
end
of the
year
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below shows how prices of 'high-tech gadgets' changed over time in Somecountry. v. 2

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