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The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. v.2

The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. v. 2
The line graph reveals data on the changes in the number of International students from four different countries living in Australia from 1982 to 2000. What stands out from the graph is that the number of students living in Australia increased for each country and Hong Kong was as the majority of students in 2000. More specifically, in the first year, there were no foreign students from three countries excepting Malaysia. However, there was a gradual rise in the number of students in both Hong Kong and Malaysia which had a similar number at 10 in 1000s students in 1994. Moreover, there was almost a treble rise for the number of students from Hong Kong within less than 30 in 1000s lived in Australia. On the other hand, the number of Indonesian remained stable at zero during the first three years and it reached a peak at almost 20 in 1000s students in 1998. Meanwhile, there was slight growth for students from Singapore throughout the years by reaching double rise within 20 in 1000s students in 2000.
The line graph reveals data on the
changes
in the
number
of International
students
from four
different
countries living in Australia from 1982 to 2000. What stands out from the graph is that the
number
of
students
living in Australia increased for each country and Hong Kong was as the majority of
students
in 2000.

More
specifically
, in the
first
year, there were no foreign
students
from three countries excepting Malaysia.
However
, there was a gradual rise in the
number
of
students
in both Hong Kong and Malaysia which had a similar
number
at 10
in 1000s
students
in 1994.
Moreover
, there was almost a treble rise for the
number
of
students
from Hong Kong within less than 30
in 1000s
lived
in Australia.

On the other hand
, the
number
of Indonesian remained stable at zero during the
first
three years and it reached a peak at almost 20
in 1000s
students
in 1998. Meanwhile, there was slight growth for
students
from Singapore throughout the years by reaching double rise within 20
in 1000s
students
in 2000.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. v. 2

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177 words
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