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The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. v.1

The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. v. 1
A glance at the chart provided reveals the number of students who continued their study in Australia from four Asian countries over a nineteen-year period from 1982 to 2000. Overall, it is clearly seen that all Asian countries experienced a considerable increase in students number in Australia. First of all, there were three countries that started at the same level in 1982 - Hong Kong, Singapore, and Indonesia. But Indonesia and Singapore levelled off until 1987, while Hong Kong students soared to somewhere in the vicinity of 10, 000 students in 1994, and reached a peak approximately 25, 000 students in 1998 before falling again just over 20, 000 students in 2000. Furthermore, the number of Indonesia students remained stable between 1992 and 1995 at 10, 000 students before reaching a peak of almost 20, 000 students in 1997 and decreased again about 15, 000 students in 1998. Meanwhile, there was a noticeable growth for Singapore students about 20, 000 in 2000. In contrast, Malaysian students number experienced a slow rise from 1982 to 1994, then reaching a peak of approximately 18, 000 students in 1997.
A glance at the chart provided reveals the
number
of
students
who continued their study in Australia from four Asian countries over a nineteen-year period from 1982 to 2000.
Overall
, it is
clearly
seen
that all Asian countries experienced a considerable increase in
students
number
in Australia.

First of all
, there were three countries that
started
at the same level in 1982
-
Hong Kong, Singapore, and Indonesia.
But
Indonesia and Singapore levelled off until 1987, while Hong Kong
students
soared to somewhere in the vicinity of 10, 000
students
in 1994, and reached a peak approximately 25, 000
students
in 1998
before
falling again
just
over 20, 000
students
in 2000.

Furthermore
, the
number
of Indonesia
students
remained stable between 1992 and 1995 at 10, 000
students
before
reaching a peak of almost 20, 000
students
in 1997 and decreased again about 15, 000
students
in 1998. Meanwhile, there was a noticeable growth for Singapore
students
about 20, 000 in 2000.
In contrast
, Malaysian
students
number
experienced a slow rise from 1982 to 1994, then reaching a peak of approximately 18, 000
students
in 1997.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

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