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the graph below shows concerns three productions in the forest industry in a European country. The production is timber, pulp, and paper increasing during the years between 1980 to 2000. v.2

the graph below shows concerns three productions in the forest industry in a European country. The production is timber, pulp, and paper increasing during the years between 1980 to 2000. v. 2
The line chart illustrates the number changed in three cohort, namely pulp, paper and timber, in a particular European nation from 1980 to 2000. The number of pulp presented steadily increased while the trends for paper and timber showed some fluctuations though both of them increased in different range. In the year 1980, the pulp industry was the most productive industry, came top with around 5 million tones which followed by paper and timber with about 4. 2 million tones and they mainly shared the same number. In the next coming years, the figure for pulp industry constantly increased and even share the same speed with one in parer in the second five years. At last, it ended up with 9 million tones which still the most among three cohorts. When it comes to the timber industry, it is noticeable that the figure remarkably rose and exceeded other two counterparts in 1985, and then finally peaked at 10 million tones in 1990, after which it plummeted and became the minority in 2000. As for the data for paper, it continued to climbed though it mainly kept stable between 1990 to 1995 and increased again in the last five years, nearly reached 8 million tones. Simply put, the production of these three industry have both experienced different range of increase.
The line chart illustrates the number
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changed
in three
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cohort
,
namely
pulp, paper and
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timber
, in a particular European nation from 1980 to 2000. The number of pulp presented
steadily
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increased
while the trends for paper and
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timber
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showed
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some
fluctuations though both of them
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increased
in
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different
range.

In the
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year
1980, the pulp
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industry
was the most productive
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industry
, came top with around 5
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million
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tones
which followed by paper and
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timber
with about 4. 2
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million
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tones
and they
mainly
shared the same number. In the
next
coming years, the figure for pulp
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industry
constantly
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increased
and even share the same speed with one in parer in the second five years. At last, it ended up with 9
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million
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tones
which
still
the most among three cohorts.

When it
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comes
to the
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timber
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industry
, it is noticeable that the figure
remarkably
rose and exceeded other two counterparts in 1985, and then
finally
peaked at 10
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million
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tones
in 1990, after which it plummeted and became the minority in 2000. As for the data for paper, it continued to climbed though it
mainly
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kept
stable
Use "between" + "and" not "to." Try this: "between 1990 and 1995".
between 1990 to 1995
and
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increased
again in the last five years,
nearly
reached 8
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million
tones.

Simply
put, the production of these three
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industry
have both experienced
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different
range of increase.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic the graph below shows concerns three productions in the forest industry in a European country. The production is timber, pulp, and paper increasing during the years between 1980 to 2000. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
219 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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