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the diagram shows the process of how to make smoked fish Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant v.2

the diagram shows the process of how to make smoked fish
The flow graph gives information about how to produce smoked fish and there are eight main steps. Firstly, all the fresh fishes need to be killed by knifes in the factor, after which those prepared fishes need to be cooked in the boiled water. At the same time, some salts are needed to spice up the fishes. Next, the whole pot is covered by the top and being cooked by the strong fire. Five minutes later, the cooked one are put into the upper space in the bucket which is divided into two space. To smoke the fish, lots of saw dusts put under the down space in the bucket are burned by hot burning coals. There are lots of smoked are produced in order to smoke fishes and add flavor in. After smoking, some of the fishes are directly sent to be packed by boxes while the rest of them need to be covered by yellow color to make them seen more delicious. And all the colored and cooked fished also sent to be packed. Finally, those smoked fish packaging are transported to the markets by many trucks.
The flow graph gives information about how to produce smoked fish and there are eight main steps.

Firstly
, all the fresh fishes need to
be killed
by knifes in the factor, after which those prepared fishes need to
be cooked
in the boiled water. At the same time,
some
salts
are needed
to spice
up


the
fishes.
Next
, the whole pot
is covered
by the top and
being cooked
by the strong fire. Five minutes later, the cooked one
are put
into the upper space in the bucket which
is divided
into two space. To smoke the fish, lots of
saw
dusts put under the down space in the bucket
are burned
by hot burning coals. There are lots of smoked
are produced
in order to smoke fishes and
add
flavor in.

After smoking,
some of the
fishes are
directly
sent
to
be packed
by boxes while the rest of them need to
be covered
by yellow color to
make
them
seen
more delicious. And all the colored and cooked fished
also
sent
to
be packed
.
Finally
, those smoked fish packaging
are transported
to the markets by
many
trucks.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic the diagram shows the process of how to make smoked fish

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
189 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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