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The graph below show the different mode of transport used to travel to and from work in 1960, 1980 and 2000. v.2

The graph below show the different mode of transport used to travel to and from work in 1960, 1980 and 2000. v. 2
The given bar graph represent information about various modes of transport used by passengers in years: 1960, 1980, 2000 respectively. The data is calibrated in per-centum. It is clear and coherent representation. Overall, it is evident that; in 1960, plethora of people used bus, but in 2000 cars were the first choice. Furthermore, in 1980 train and bus. On other hand, car and tube show equal proportion It can be seen, by comparing train and car as a transport facility in three different years. it is depicted that, in 1960 train was highly used by people about 18% while, car was only 15%. In addition to this, in year 1980; availability of train is 5% more than car. Furthermore, during 2000, car was at its highest peak represent approximate 38% as compare to train that is 22% only. As far as trend was concerned, by comparing transport facility such as: tube and bus it seems that people give more priority to bus than tube. Its percentage was shown in bar graph 38%, 28% respectively. Moreover, in 1980 and 2000 bus was used 8 percent more than tube, but in 2000 tube preference reached at 25% while, bus was only 15% used by people.
The
given
bar graph represent information about various modes of transport
used
by passengers in years: 1960, 1980, 2000
respectively
. The data
is calibrated
in
per-centum
. It is
clear
and coherent representation.

Overall
, it is evident that; in 1960, plethora of
people
used
bus,
but
in 2000
cars
were the
first
choice.
Furthermore
, in 1980
train
and bus. On other hand,
car
and
tube
show
equal
proportion


It can be
seen
, by comparing
train
and
car
as a transport facility in three
different
years.
it
is depicted
that, in 1960
train
was
highly
used
by
people
about 18% while,
car
was
only
15%.
In addition
to this, in year 1980; availability of
train
is 5% more than
car
.
Furthermore
, during 2000,
car
was at its highest peak represent approximate 38% as compare to
train
that is
22%
only
.

As far as trend
was concerned
, by comparing transport facility such as:
tube
and bus it seems that
people
give more priority to bus than
tube
. Its percentage
was shown
in bar graph 38%, 28%
respectively
.
Moreover
, in 1980 and 2000 bus was
used
8 percent more than
tube
,
but
in 2000
tube
preference reached at 25% while, bus was
only
15%
used
by
people
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below show the different mode of transport used to travel to and from work in 1960, 1980 and 2000. v. 2

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203 words
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