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the graph belo sho s the proportion of the population aged 65 and over bet een 1940 and 2040 n three different countries v.2

the graph belo sho s the proportion of the population aged 65 and over bet een 1940 and 2040 n three different countries v. 2
The given line graph demonstrates information of the percentages of people üho are in the age of 65 and over in the USA, Süeden and Japan from 1940 to 2040. At the first glance, we can see that the population of these countries will be increase sharply while Japan and USA will be in a same numbers between 2020 and 2040. The elder people in Sweden and USA were nearly 10 % in 1940 and the figures rose till 1980 just half thirty. Near the new era elder people of Sweden were rising while the numbers were decreasing in USA. But, it predicts that numerous of olders will be jump to approximately quarter percentages and over. Now, turning to the details of Japan the percentages was a small fraction about 5 % and fell dramatically and reached again the same number during 70 years. After 2000s the figures is running and expect that the percentages of elder Japanese will be in a high level nearly 27 %.
The
given
line graph demonstrates information of the
percentages
of
people
üho
are in the age of 65 and over in the USA,
Süeden
and Japan from 1940 to 2040.

At the
first
glance, we can
see
that the population of these countries will be increase
sharply
while Japan and USA will be in a same numbers between 2020 and 2040.

The elder
people
in Sweden and USA were
nearly
10 % in 1940 and the figures rose till 1980
just
half thirty. Near the new era elder
people
of Sweden were rising while the numbers were decreasing
in USA
.
But
, it predicts that numerous of
olders will
be
jump
to approximately quarter
percentages
and over.

Now
, turning to the
details
of Japan the
percentages
was a
small
fraction about 5 % and fell
dramatically
and reached again the same number during 70 years. After 2000s the figures is running and
expect
that the
percentages
of elder Japanese will be in a high level
nearly
27 %.
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IELTS academic the graph belo sho s the proportion of the population aged 65 and over bet een 1940 and 2040 n three different countries v. 2

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4 paragraphs
167 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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