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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. v.6

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. v. 6
The volume of water consumed in three sectors-  agriculture, industry and domestic, in the twentieth century is demonstrated in the line graph. Meanwhile, the given table illustrates the differences between agricultural and personal water consumptions in Brazil and Congo in 2000. As the line graph represents, the highest quantity of water was consumed, throughout the given years, for the farming and it soared remarkably from 500 km3 to around 3000 km3 in 2000. An inconsiderable amount of water was used for the industrial and domestic purposes till the mid of the century. From 1950 onward, industrial water use raised steadily to above 1000 km3 while domestic utilisation of water climbed more slowly to approximately 300 km3. By looking at the table it is clear that Brazil had 176 million population and 26500 km2 irrigation fields compare to Congo that had 5. 2 million population and just 100 km2 arming lands in 2000. Consequently, the volume of water consumed by an average Brazilian was overwhelmingly greater than the water consumption of a person who lived in Congo.
The volume of
water
consumed in three sectors-
 
agriculture, industry and domestic, in the twentieth century
is demonstrated
in the line graph. Meanwhile, the
given
table illustrates the differences between agricultural and personal
water
consumptions
in Brazil and Congo in 2000.

As the line graph represents, the highest quantity of
water
was consumed
, throughout the
given
years, for the farming and it soared
remarkably
from 500 km3 to around 3000 km3 in 2000. An inconsiderable amount of
water
was
used
for the industrial and domestic purposes till the mid of the century. From 1950 onward, industrial
water
use
raised
steadily
to above 1000 km3 while domestic
utilisation
of
water
climbed more
slowly
to approximately 300 km3.

By looking at the table it is
clear
that Brazil had 176 million population and 26500 km2 irrigation fields compare to Congo that had 5. 2 million population and
just
100 km2 arming lands in 2000.
Consequently
, the volume of
water
consumed by an average Brazilian was
overwhelmingly
greater than the
water
consumption of a person who
lived
in Congo.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. v. 6

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3 paragraphs
176 words
6.0
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