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The graph and table below give information about four new painkilling drugs which have recently been tested on patients. v.2

The graph and table below give information about four new painkilling drugs which have recently been tested on patients. v. 2
The bar graph provides the information of the painkillers’ price while the table shows the response of patients when examined with these drugs. It can be seen that the price of pain killing drugs contrasted to the speed effect, effectiveness, and the length of pain killing after given to the patients. However, the Asprobeta as the cheapest became the most curable painkillers for the patients. To begin, the Herbelieve was the most expensive drug with £2. 40 per packet, but it showed the ineffectiveness in reducing pain that 56% of patients felt ineffective performance. This contrasted to the Asprobeta as the cheapest pain healer that 68% of patients faced the very effective result of this new drug. In addition, Asprobeta also showed the longer pain killing effect that 61% of patients did not feel the pain for more than 4 hours. Again and again, Herbal painkillers only resulted less than 2 hours durability to kill the pain. Moving to more detailed analysis, Paradocs and Iburight of which the price were fairly similar at £1. 70 and £1. 80 respectively became the average price of painkillers. These drugs were chosen by patients as the most reactive in killing their pain, taking only less than 10 minutes for both drugs.
The bar graph provides the information of the
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price
while the table
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shows
the response of
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patients
when examined with these
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drugs
. It can be
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seen
that the
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price
of
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pain
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killing
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drugs
contrasted to the speed effect, effectiveness, and the length of
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pain
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killing
after
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given
to the
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patients
.
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, the
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Asprobeta
as the cheapest became the most curable
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painkillers
for the patients.

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begin
, the
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Herbelieve
was the most expensive
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drug
with £2. 40 per packet,
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but
it
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showed
the ineffectiveness in reducing
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pain
that 56% of
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patients
felt ineffective performance. This contrasted to the
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Asprobeta
as the cheapest
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pain
healer that 68% of
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patients
faced the
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very
effective result of this new
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drug
.
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,
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Asprobeta
also
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showed
the longer
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pain
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killing
effect that 61% of
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patients
did not feel the
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pain
for more than 4 hours. Again and again, Herbal
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painkillers
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only
resulted less than 2 hours durability to kill the pain.

Moving to more detailed analysis,
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Paradocs
and
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Iburight
of which the
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price
were
fairly
similar at £1. 70 and £1. 80
respectively
became the average
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price
of
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painkillers
. These
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drugs
were chosen
by
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patients
as the most reactive in
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killing
their
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pain
, taking
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only
less than 10 minutes for both
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drugs
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS academic The graph and table below give information about four new painkilling drugs which have recently been tested on patients. v. 2

Academic
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3 paragraphs
208 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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