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The charts show what the history and engineering graduates were doing six months after graduating. v.2

The charts show what the history and engineering graduates were doing six months after graduating. v. 2
The two bar charts give key information about the state of students six months after graduation from two different courses in a single university, taken from two successive years. Although a high percentage of both specialities were able to find work, engineering graduates’ stats were somewhat higher. Additionally, employment was rather higher in the second year for both. Unemployment for the historians, standing at about 5% in year one and just below that in year two, was notably less than it was for engineers, being as high as 10% and slightly increasing the following year. That could be explained by the fact that graduates pursuing higher qualifications were considerably higher in the field of history than their counterparts in engineering. At the same time taking a gap year after leaving university seems to be more common in history than engineering. To sum up, even though, at first glance, it seems more promising to study history in terms of finding a job, the explanation may lie in the tendency of students studying history to spend additional years in further study.
The two bar charts give key information about the state of students six months after graduation from two
different
courses in a single university, taken from two successive years.

Although a high percentage of both specialities were able to find work, engineering graduates’ stats were somewhat higher.
Additionally
, employment was
rather
higher in the second
year
for both. Unemployment for the historians, standing at about 5% in
year
one and
just
below that in
year
two, was
notably
less than it was for engineers, being as high as 10% and
slightly
increasing the following
year
. That could be
explained
by the fact that graduates pursuing higher qualifications were
considerably
higher in the field of
history
than their counterparts in engineering. At the same time taking a gap
year
after leaving university seems to be more common in
history
than engineering.

To sum up,
even though
, at
first
glance, it seems more promising to study
history
in terms of finding a job, the explanation may lie in the tendency of students studying
history
to spend additional years in
further
study.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The charts show what the history and engineering graduates were doing six months after graduating. v. 2

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3 paragraphs
179 words
6.5
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