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the table below gives information about the value of exports of kiwi fruit from New Zealand to five countries between 2010 and 2012 v.1

the table below gives information about the value of exports of kiwi fruit from New Zealand to five countries between 2010 and 2012 v. 1
The given table illustrates the export value of kiwi fruit from New Zealand to five other countries which is Japan, China, Mexico, Russia and Saudi Arabia from 2010 to 2012. Overall it’s clear that there is a high demand for the kiwi fruit in Japan, although Saudi Arabia shows the least interest on the fruit. While Japan shows the highest interest about the fruit which is $271, 100. 00 and growing rapidly over the years and in 2012 shows the highest of all comparing to other countries which is $ 325, 300, 000 in value. Secondly, export to china shows $74, 900, 000 in 2010 and also growing rapidly over the years and in 2012 it shows a value of $94, 000, 000. Export to Mexico shows some fluctuations in the value which is $6, 000, 000 in 2010 and shows a drop of $3, 600, 000 in 2011 and a growth of $ 3, 300, 000 in 2012. According to the table the lowest export value shows in Saudi Arabia in 2010 and it rapidly decreasing over the years and in 2012 it shows a value of $ 82, 000 which means the lowest value comparing to the other four countries.
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of kiwi fruit from New Zealand to five other countries which is Japan, China, Mexico, Russia and Saudi Arabia from 2010 to 2012.

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that there is a high demand for the kiwi fruit in Japan, although Saudi Arabia
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the least interest on the fruit.

While Japan
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the highest interest about the fruit which is $271, 100. 00 and growing
rapidly
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the highest of all comparing to other countries which is
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$ 325
, 300, 000 in
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china
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$74, 900, 000 in 2010 and
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of $94, 000,
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000. Export
to Mexico
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which is $6, 000, 000 in 2010 and
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a drop of $3, 600, 000 in 2011 and a growth of
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$ 3
, 300, 000 in 2012. According to the table the lowest
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in Saudi Arabia in 2010 and
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comparing to the other four countries.
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IELTS academic the table below gives information about the value of exports of kiwi fruit from New Zealand to five countries between 2010 and 2012 v. 1

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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