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The chart shows the number of international students from four different countries applyingfor universities in a European country from the year 2004 to 2008. v.2

The chart shows the number of international students from four different countries applyingfor universities in a European country from the year 2004 to 2008. v. 2
The bar chart indicates how many foreigner students who come from four separated nations over the world have demand to learn at the college in a European country for a-five-year period. Overall, the number of students from China had a down trend while those of the other regions fluctuated. China is the country where had the highest proportion of students among four areas. The number of learners from China declined dramatically from 3000 in 2004 to 15000 in 2008, which was only a half of compared figure in 2004. The second position was America where the total of students apply for universities in an European country varied around 15000. In three years 2006, 2007 and 2008, China and Europe had the same level of the number of students who want to study in Europe. There was an significant increase in the number of people applying colleges in Europe from 2004 to 2007, but then this figure decreased strongly to about 1000 students in 2008 while the total of Russian students were stable with around 2500 students.
The bar chart indicates how
many
foreigner
students
who
come
from four separated nations over the world have demand to learn at the college in a European country for a-five-year period.
Overall
, the
number
of
students
from China had a down trend while those of the other regions fluctuated.

China is the country where had the highest proportion of
students
among four areas. The
number
of learners from China declined
dramatically
from 3000 in 2004 to 15000 in 2008, which was
only
a half of compared figure in 2004. The second position was America where the total of
students
apply
for universities in
an
European country varied around 15000. In three years 2006, 2007 and 2008, China and Europe had the same level of the
number
of
students
who want to study in Europe.

There was
an
significant increase in the
number
of
people
applying colleges in Europe from 2004 to 2007,
but
then this figure decreased
strongly
to about 1000
students
in 2008 while the total of Russian
students
were stable with around 2500
students
.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic The chart shows the number of international students from four different countries applyingfor universities in a European country from the year 2004 to 2008. v. 2

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6.0
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