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The following graph shows the number of people by age attending the cinema more than once a month Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below Write at least 150 words v.2

The following graph shows the number of people by age attending the cinema more than once a month Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below v. 2
The line graph compares the figures for people (in percentage) going to the cinema more than once a month from 1984 to 2003. Overall, it is clear that the number of people (all age brackets) going to the cinema increased in 2003. It can also be seen that 15-24 year olds had the highest number of cinema attendance over the entire period among the four age groups. Between 1984 and 1991, the figure for moviegoers aged 15-24 doubled from 17%. During the same period, the number of 7-14 year olds fluctuated while the number of 23-34 year olds rose gradually with percentages of 10 and 5 in 1984 respectively. In 1991, the proportion for both groups was equal at 15%. In the following 12 years, the trend continued to increase for these age brackets. The number of 15-24 reached its highest peak of 58% in 1999 but dropped by 8% in 2002. There was no data recorded in 2003 for this group. On the other hand, the pattern for the other two age groups nearly closed at some points. In 2003, nearly 40% of 7-14 year olds went to the cinema while the figures for 23-34 year olds fell behind at 35%. Meanwhile, the figure for people aged 35 and over remained the lowest over the entire period starting from 1% in 1984 growing just under 20% in 2003.
The line graph compares the
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people
(in percentage) going to the
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cinema
more than once a month from 1984 to 2003.
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, it is
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clear
that the
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number
of
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people
(all
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age
brackets) going to the
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cinema
increased in 2003. It can
also
be
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seen
that 15-24
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year
olds had the highest
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number
of
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cinema
attendance over the entire period among the four
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age
groups.

Between 1984 and 1991, the
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figure
for moviegoers aged 15-24 doubled from 17%. During the same period, the
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number
of 7-14
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year
olds fluctuated while the
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number
of 23-34
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year
olds rose
gradually
with percentages of 10 and 5 in 1984
respectively
. In 1991, the proportion for both groups was equal at 15%.

In the following 12 years, the trend continued to increase for these
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age
brackets. The
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number
of 15-24 reached its highest peak of 58% in 1999
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but
dropped by 8% in 2002. There was no data recorded in 2003 for this group.
On the other hand
, the pattern for the other two
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age
groups
nearly
closed at
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some
points. In 2003,
nearly
40% of 7-14
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year
olds went to the
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cinema
while the
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figures
for 23-34
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year
olds fell behind at 35%.

Meanwhile, the
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figure
for
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people
aged 35 and over remained the lowest over the entire period starting from 1% in 1984 growing
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just
under 20% in 2003.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The following graph shows the number of people by age attending the cinema more than once a month Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below v. 2

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4 paragraphs
229 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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