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The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. v.5

The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. v. 5
The bar chart shows the gender distribution of teachers teaching in six different levels of education in England in 2010. In two of six grades, primary and pre-school, females much further outnumbered males as teachers. There was slightly different in secondary school level, in which women teacher’s number were still dominant. The percentage of the college teachers, both women and men, were equal. Males won in private training institute, by over 50%. There was a sharp gap in the university where the number of male teachers was higher than females, 70% male teachers against 30% female teachers. Overall, the graph shows that in the UK, female teachers were famous in teaching from toddlers to secondary school. Meanwhile, male teachers were the highest percentage in teaching in the university and private training. In the college level, same numbers of male and female teachers were teaching in 2010 in the UK. The presented data depicts that male teachers mostly taught in higher level while more female teachers were teaching on the primary level.
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teachers
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in six
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different
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levels
of education in England in 2010.

In two of six grades, primary and
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pre-school
,
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females
much
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males
as
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teachers
. There was
slightly
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different
in secondary school
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level
, in which women
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teacher’s
number were
still
dominant. The percentage of the college
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teachers
, both women and
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men
, were equal.
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Males
won in private training institute, by over 50%. There was a sharp gap in the university where the number of male
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teachers
was higher than
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females
, 70% male
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teachers
against 30%
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female
teachers.

Overall
, the graph
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shows
that in the UK,
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female
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teachers
were
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famous
in
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teaching
from toddlers to secondary school. Meanwhile, male
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teachers
were the highest percentage in
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teaching
in the university and private training. In the college
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level
, same numbers of male and
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female
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teachers
were
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teaching
in 2010 in the UK. The presented data depicts that male
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teachers
mostly
taught in higher
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level
while more
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female
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teachers
were
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teaching
on the primary
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level
.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. v. 5

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