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The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. v.4

The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. v. 4
The column graph compares the male and female teachers’ ratio in six different levels of educational institutions in the United Kingdom in 2010. As an overall trend, colleges and universities in the UK had more male lecturers while more female teachers were employed in lowers grades. As can be seen from the diagram, the ratio of female instructors in the UK in 2010 was quite higher in the nursery and elementary levels as their percentage was around 90%. The female academics in secondary level was just above the half while an exact ratio of male and female lecturers could be observed in colleges. A contrasting scenario was visible in universities and private training institutes as male teachers dominated these two educational settings. In university level, 3 females were employed against 7 male mentors while this ratio was 4 by 5 in private institutes who provided training courses. In summary, male teachers in the UK was higher in numbers in upper grades while this was completely opposite in primary and pre-school levels.
The column graph compares the male and
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of educational institutions in the United Kingdom in 2010. As an
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female
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were employed
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instructors in the UK in 2010 was quite higher in the nursery and elementary
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as their percentage was around 90%. The
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academics in secondary
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of male and
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lecturers could
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in colleges. A contrasting scenario was visible in universities and private training institutes as male
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dominated these two educational settings. In university
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, 3
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females
were employed
against 7 male mentors while this
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was 4 by 5 in private institutes who provided training courses.

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teachers
in the UK was higher in numbers in upper grades while this was completely opposite in primary and
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pre-school
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. v. 4

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