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The environment we are living in is in danger due to various problems…so who do u think should be responsible to solve it? Is it the governments, organisation or each individuals? v.2

The environment we are living in is in danger due to various problems…so who do u think should be responsible to solve it? Is it the governments, organisation or each individuals? v. 2
Humans are responsible for the environment related issues. As we are living in this and only we are resposible for this, So if we are the only reason then it' s our responsibility to over come this problem. Nowadays as we can see there are many factories are located which are emmiting the poisionous gas all the time apart from that now we are using bike, car, many vehicle from which environmental air get polluted. Also as we all know the population is increasing day by day so we are making more waste as well and disposal of the waste is not proper which leads our river and ocean polluted. Now I think the government should take a strict action by passing a law for this, So that we can use more public transport more as compare to our personal vehical. Government should take the extra tax from the people who are not helping the government. Overall we can say environment is like our home So only we are responsible to make it clean and tidy. If we think in this way then may be we will get rid of this environment hazard.
Humans are responsible for the environment related issues. As we are living in this and
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this problem.

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there are
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factories
are located
which are
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emmiting
the
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poisionous
gas all the time apart from that
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now
we are using bike, car,
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many vehicle
from which environmental air
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polluted.
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Also
as we all know the population is increasing day by day
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so
we are making more waste
as well
and disposal of the waste is not proper which leads our river and ocean polluted.

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Now
I
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think
the
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government
should take a strict action by passing a law for this,
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So
that we can
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use
more public transport more
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as
compare to our personal
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vehical
.
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Government
should take the extra tax from the
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people
who are not helping the
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government
.

Overall
we can say environment is like our home
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So
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only
we are responsible to
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make
it clean and tidy. If we
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think
in this way then
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may be
we will
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get
rid of this environment hazard.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes
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IELTS academic The environment we are living in is in danger due to various problems…so who do u think should be responsible to solve it? Is it the governments, organisation or each individuals? v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
193 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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