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The diagrams below show UK students' responses to the question of to what extent would they describe themselves as financially organised. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The diagrams below show UK students' responses to the question of
The pie chart shows the percentage of how good students manage their finances and the table depicts the number of students in three age groups organises finance well. Overall, it is clear that most of the students' answers are fairly organised. The number of students in the age group of over 36 years is very organised. Looking at the first chart, the highest number of students, with 55%, respond that they organise their finances very well. The figure for those who answer very or not very organised is lower, at around 20%. By contrast, only a few students say that they are not at all organised, at 4%. Turning to the second chart, we can see that most of those who are 36-year-old are very organised, while there are only 26% of students who are in their 23-25 years manage their finances well. On the other hand, the proportion of students aged up to 22 years, which is the lowest percentage, is very organised at managing their finances, at 18%.
The pie chart
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the percentage of how
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good
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students
manage their
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finances
and the table depicts the number of
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students
in three age groups
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organises
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finance
well.
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, it is
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that most of the
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. The number of
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students
in the age group of over 36 years is
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very
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organised
.

Looking at the
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chart, the highest number of
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students
, with 55%, respond that they
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organise
their
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finances
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very
well. The figure for those who answer
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very
or not
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very
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is lower, at around 20%. By contrast,
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only
a few
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students
say that they are not at all
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organised
, at 4%.

Turning to the second chart, we can
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that most of those who are 36-year-
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are
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very
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organised
, while there are
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only
26% of
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students
who are in their 23-25 years manage their
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finances
well.
On the other hand
, the proportion of
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students
aged up to 22 years, which is the lowest percentage, is
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very
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organised
at managing their
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finances
, at 18%.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS academic The diagrams below show UK students' responses to the question of

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
170 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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