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The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia at present and in future Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features v.2

The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia at present and in future
A glance at the diagram provided reveals the information about the current water supply system and the ongoing plan in the future. Overall, the change in the system is based on water usage in the city. Currently, according to the diagram, water which is ready for use is at first stored in the dam. The pure water then would be transferred to the city to be used by households, factories, and shops. From now on, the storm water kept in the city would be directly released into the river, whereas the wastewater would be directed to the water treatment plant for processing before being released into the river. In the future, the route of the water supply is scheduled to be changed. The pure water still will be transferred into the city; nevertheless, storm water in the city will be directly sent to the water treatment plant. After storm water and wastewater being processed, the water will not be led to the river as before. The water will be transferred back to the city for residents for use instead.
A glance at the diagram provided reveals the information about the
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current
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supply system and the ongoing plan in the future.
Overall
, the
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change
in the system
is based
on
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water
usage in the city.

Currently
, according to the diagram,
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water
which is ready for
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use
is at
first
stored in the dam. The pure
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water
then would
be transferred
to the city to be
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used
by households, factories, and shops. From
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now
on, the storm
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water
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kept
in the city would be
directly
released into the river, whereas the wastewater would
be directed
to the
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water
treatment plant for processing
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before
being released
into the river.

In the future, the route of the
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water
supply
is scheduled
to be
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changed
. The pure
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water
still
will
be transferred
into the city;
nevertheless
, storm
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water
in the city will be
directly
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sent
to the
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water
treatment plant. After storm
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water
and wastewater
being processed
, the
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water
will not
be led
to the river as
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before
. The
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water
will
be transferred
back to the city for residents for
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use
instead
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia at present and in future

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
179 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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