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The diagram shows proposed changes to Foster Road. Write a 150-word report describing the proposed changes for a local committee. v.2

The diagram shows proposed changes to Foster Road. Write a 150-word report describing the proposed changes for a local committee. v. 2
The diagram shows proposals to transform Foster Road between SE 84th and 85th Avenue into a tree-lined avenue that is safer for pedestrians and cyclists. First of all, the planners propose to widen the sidewalk on both sides of the road and add bicycle lanes. This will mean reducing the number of lanes for cars and other vehicles. A pedestrian crossing will also be installed at the lower end of the street, near the gas station. This crossing will include an island in the middle where people can wait in safety. In addition to the safety measures above, planners also want to plant trees along both sides of the road. These trees will transform the appearance of the neighbourhood as well as provide vital extra shade for pedestrians. To summarise, under these proposals, the needs of local residents will be better served by making Foster Road a safer and more pleasant environment.
The diagram
shows
proposals to transform Foster
Road
between SE 84th and 85th Avenue into a tree-lined avenue
that is
safer for pedestrians and cyclists.

First of all
, the planners propose to widen the sidewalk on both sides of the
road
and
add
bicycle lanes. This will mean reducing the number of lanes for cars and other vehicles. A pedestrian crossing will
also
be installed
at the lower
end
of the street, near the gas station. This crossing will include an island in the middle where
people
can wait in safety.

In addition
to the safety measures above, planners
also
want to plant trees along both sides of the
road
. These trees will transform the appearance of the
neighbourhood
as well
as provide vital extra shade for pedestrians.

To
summarise
, under these proposals, the needs of local residents will be better served by making Foster
Road
a safer and more pleasant environment.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic The diagram shows proposed changes to Foster Road. Write a 150-word report describing the proposed changes for a local committee. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
152 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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