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The line graph shows Paris Metro station passengers Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The line graph shows Paris Metro station passengers
The line graph compares the number or passengers that metro station received in Paris from 6am to 10pm. It is clear that the highest number of people used the train between 8am and 9am, and between 18: 00 and 19: 00. By contrast, the time between 16: 00 and 17: 00 saw the lowest number of people using the service. The number of passenger rose dramatically from 100 at 6am to a peak of 400 around 8. 30am. however, the figure dropped substantially by around 200 people by approximately 10am. From 10am to roughly 16: 30, there was a fluctuation between 100 and 300 people, reaching the lowest number of people again at 16: 00. More and more passengers started to take the train from 4pm to around 6. 30pm, with the increase of 300 people. But the figure fell substantially fell to 100 passengers at 8. 15pm. there was a slight increase of 100 people during one hour, but dropped around 90 people at 22: 30.
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that metro station received in Paris from 6am to 10pm.

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the train between 8am and 9am, and between 18: 00 and 19: 00. By contrast, the time between 16: 00 and 17: 00
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by approximately 10am. From 10am to roughly 16: 30, there was a fluctuation between 100 and 300
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, reaching the lowest
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again at 16: 00.

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during one hour,
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at 22: 30.
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IELTS academic The line graph shows Paris Metro station passengers

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