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The diagram below show how an office building look at present and the plan for its future development. v.2

The diagram below show how an office building look at present and the plan for its future development. v. 2
The provided maps give information about the current look and planned development of an office building. As can be seen that, in the present layout there are a vast amount of area on the left and right side covered with the grass. However, entrance is on the south-east side and the reception is in the front of the entrance. There are four offices located on the south wall. On the opposite, a kitchen, canteen and stock room can be seen. Moreover, wash room is situated between the stock room and the reception. Looking at the future plan of office building, the grass area of the left side converted into the outdoor activity area. The entrance and reception are estimated to removed in the centre and the offices on the south wall increased and proposed to locate on the left and right side of the reception. Furthermore, kitchen, canteen and wash room planned to remove from the future development. New facility of meeting area will be constructed on the south-east side and there would be coffee machine on the north-east side. Overall, some major changes are projected for the future layout of the office building.
The provided maps give information about the
current
look and planned development of an
office
building.

As can be
seen
that, in the present layout there are a vast
amount
of
area
on the
left
and right side covered with the grass.
However
, entrance is on the south-east side and the reception is in the front of the entrance. There are four
offices
located on the south wall. On the opposite, a kitchen, canteen and stock
room
can be
seen
.
Moreover
, wash
room
is situated
between the stock
room
and the reception.

Looking at the future plan of
office
building, the grass
area
of the
left
side converted into the outdoor activity
area
. The entrance and reception
are estimated
to removed in the
centre
and the
offices
on the south wall increased and proposed to locate on the
left
and right side of the reception.
Furthermore
, kitchen, canteen and wash
room
planned to remove from the future development. New facility of meeting
area
will
be constructed
on the south-east side and there would be coffee machine on the north-east side.

Overall
,
some
major
changes
are projected
for the future layout of the
office
building.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The diagram below show how an office building look at present and the plan for its future development. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
194 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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