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The diagram below show how a solar powered water pump works. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and, make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The diagram below show how a solar powered water pump works.
The pictorial representation illustrates the information about how a solar powered water pump is utilised to supply water for the countryside with using three various kinds of equipments. In overall, there are three types of components such as solar panel, an underground bore as well as water tank containing water is spending into this process. In contrast, in this method four steps is involved. However, omission of any step will halt the whole process. With regards to an initial step, a solar panel is utilise to collecting power from sun rays with using photovoltaic cells and these cells stand their mouth in the front of sun. Secondly, the collection of DC currents is sent into underground bore by panel. The diagram further proves that in the next stage, this Direct Current power is spent to receiving water from the depth of land. Likewise, this water pump is built up into the ground level. In the following stage, these water is taken from ground with the help of pipes and pipes throw these water into the tank. Eventually, the water tank supplies these fresh water to the whole village by pipeline.
The pictorial representation illustrates the information about how a solar powered
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water
pump is
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utilised
to supply
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water
for the countryside with using three various kinds of equipments.

In
overall
, there are three types of components such as solar panel, an underground bore
as well
as
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water
tank containing
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water
is spending into this process.
In contrast
, in this method four steps
is involved
.
However
, omission of any step will halt the whole process.

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With regards to
an initial step, a solar panel is
Consider using a past participle here: "utilised".
utilise
to collecting power from sun rays with using photovoltaic cells and these cells stand their mouth in the front of sun.
Secondly
, the collection of DC currents is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
into underground bore by panel.

The diagram
further
proves that in the
next
stage, this Direct
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Current
power
is spent
to receiving
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water
from the depth of land.
Likewise
, this
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water
pump
is built
up into the ground level. In the following stage, these
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water
is taken
from ground with the
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help
of pipes and pipes throw these
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water
into the tank.
Eventually
, the
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water
tank supplies these fresh
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water
to the whole village by pipeline.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The diagram below show how a solar powered water pump works.

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