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The civic center will be planned to change. There are two maps: one is the existing and the other is the plan for new. v.2

The civic center will be planned to change. There are two maps: one is the existing and the other is the plan for new. v. 2
The two maps describe the current situation of the civic center and the future plan for this center. Overall, the re-design of the civic center presents the location changes in all the buildings except the concert hall and the shopping center, with a library disappearing and a theater, an open park and a hotel & restaurant appearing. Starting with the first may, a concert hall stands between the car park at the top-left side and another one at the top-right side, on the south of which is a shopping center. To the south of the concert hall is situated a council office, with an exhibition hall to the west and a library to the east. Turning now to the new plan, the library will be removed from this area, and on its location will be the exhibition hall. Meanwhile, the council office will be moved to the previous location of the exhibition hall. Also, the former area for the council office will become a larger place which consists of two floors, one for an open park and the other for an underground car park. The old car parks will be substituted for by a new theatre westward and by a hotel and restaurant eastward.
The two maps
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describe
the
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current
situation of the civic center and the future plan for this center.
Overall
, the re-design of the civic center presents the location
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changes
in all the buildings except the concert
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hall
and the shopping center, with a library disappearing and a theater, an open
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park
and a hotel
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; restaurant appearing.

Starting with the
first
may, a concert
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hall
stands between the car
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park
at the top-
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left
side and another one at the top-right side, on the south of which is a shopping center. To the south of the concert
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hall
is situated
a council office, with an exhibition
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hall
to the west and a library to the east.

Turning
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now
to the new plan, the library will
be removed
from this area, and on its location will be the exhibition
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hall
. Meanwhile, the council office will be
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moved
to the previous location of the exhibition
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hall
.
Also
, the former area for the council office will become a larger place which consists of two floors, one for an open
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park
and the other for an underground car
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park
. The
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old
car
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parks
will
be substituted
for by a new
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theatre
westward and by a hotel and restaurant eastward.
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11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The civic center will be planned to change. There are two maps: one is the existing and the other is the plan for new. v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
204 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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