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The charts summarize the weight measurements of people living in Charleston in 1955 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The charts summarize the weight measurements of people living in Charleston in 1955 and 2015.
The bar chart below illustrates the figures of people who lives in Charleston in 1955 and 2015 by age. Generally, both period experienced considerable modification in each period shown. It is certain that ideal weighed person account for the largest proportion by the age from 20 to 29 in each period of 2015 and 1995. In 2015, the figures for 30-39 aged people, however, was significant for amount, at about 30 percent, leading them the major consequence for all period of the time, compare with obese people just about 10 percent. In 1995, obese people was significantly lower rather than latter period people, between ages 40-49. In additional, there was importantly higher proportion for obese people in 2015 for both ages 50-59 and 60-69 respectively. However, last 2 ages of obese people was just reach 10 percent correspondingly. It have revealed that the numbers of underweight person were relatively poorer for every age in all period.
The bar chart below illustrates the figures of
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experienced considerable modification in each
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shown.

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from 20 to 29 in each
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of 2015 and 1995. In 2015, the figures for 30-39 aged
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,
however
, was significant for amount, at about 30 percent, leading them the major consequence for all
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of the time, compare with
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obese
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about 10 percent.

In 1995,
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was
significantly
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, between
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40-49.
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higher proportion for
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people
in 2015 for both
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50-59 and 60-69
respectively
.
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, last 2
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revealed that the numbers of underweight person were
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in all
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IELTS academic The charts summarize the weight measurements of people living in Charleston in 1955 and 2015.

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4 paragraphs
156 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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