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The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999 v.2

The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999 v. 2
The pie chart compares figures for visitors to four categories of tourist attraction and to five different theme parks in Britain in 1999. It is clear that theme parks and museums / galleries were the two most popular types of tourist attraction in that year. Blackpool Pleasure Beach received by far the highest proportion of visitors in the theme park sector. Looking at the information in more detail, we can see that 38% of the surveyed visitors went to a theme park, and 37% of them went to a museum or gallery. By contrast, historic houses and monuments were visited by only 16% of the sample, while wildlife parks and zoos were the least popular of the four types of tourist attraction, with only 9% of visitors. In the theme park sector, almost half of the people surveyed (47%) had been to Blackpool Pleasure Beach. Alton Towers was the second most popular amusement park, with 17% of the sample, followed by Pleasureland in Southport, with 16%. Finally, Chessington World of Adventures and Legoland Windsor had each welcomed 10% of the surveyed visitors.
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in Britain in 1999.

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and museums / galleries were the two most popular types of tourist attraction in that year. Blackpool Pleasure Beach received by far the highest proportion of
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in the
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sector.

Looking at the information in more detail, we can
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that 38% of the surveyed
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went to a
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, and 37% of them went to a museum or gallery. By contrast, historic
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houses
and monuments
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16% of the sample, while wildlife
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and zoos were the least popular of the four types of tourist attraction, with
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9% of visitors.

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sector, almost half of the
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surveyed (47%) had been to Blackpool Pleasure Beach. Alton Towers was the second most popular amusement
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, with 17% of the sample, followed by
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, with 16%.
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World of Adventures and
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Windsor had each welcomed 10% of the surveyed
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999 v. 2

Academic
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4 paragraphs
182 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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