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Percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Percentage of water used for different purposes v.3

Percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Percentage of water used for different purposes v. 3
The pie charts illustrate the portion of water consumed in various purposes in six regions of the globe. It can be seen in the charts that consumption of water in agricultural field are the most in regions except for North America and Europe, where water usages in industrial sectors are the highest. In Central Asia, agricultural sector uses water the highest, at 88%, followed by Africa and South East Asia, at 84% and 81% respectively. Moreover, South American uses most of the water in agriculture as well. However, the need of water for agricultural purposes in North America and Europe is the second highest component, at 39% and 32%. In contrast, while industries in North America and Europe use a major portion of water, factories in Africa and Central Asia consume the water the least. South East Asia and South America require more or less the same amount of water in industries. The usage of water in domestic needs is same in South and Central part of Asia, at 7%. Similarly, in North America and Europe consume the same level of water, while in Africa household water usages has been just below 10%.
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consumed in various purposes in six regions of the globe. It can be
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in the charts that consumption of
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in agricultural field are the most in regions
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America and Europe, where
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usages in industrial sectors are the highest.

In Central Asia, agricultural sector
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the highest, at 88%, followed by Africa and South East Asia, at 84% and 81%
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in agriculture
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for agricultural purposes in
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America and Europe is the second highest component, at 39% and 32%.

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, while industries in
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a major portion of
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, factories in Africa and Central Asia consume the
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the least. South East Asia and South America require more or less the same amount of
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in industries.

The usage of
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in domestic needs is same in South and Central part of Asia, at 7%.
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North
America and Europe consume the same level of
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, while in Africa household
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usages has been
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below 10%.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic Percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Percentage of water used for different purposes v. 3

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4 paragraphs
193 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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