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the charts below show the proportion of people's spending on different commodities and services in a particular European county in 1958 and in 2008 v.1

the charts below show the proportion of people's spending on different commodities and services in a particular European county in 1958 and in 2008 v. 1
The pie charts compare the expenditure on 5 different categories: Housing, Clothing, Entertainment, Food, Travel/Sport and Luxury goods in a particular European nation between 1958 and 2008. Overall, there was an increase in the spending on Housing, Food and Luxury goods while those for Clothing, Entertainment and Travel/Sport decreased. In 1958, 22% of people’s spending on Housing. The expenditure on Housing increased to 32%, which accounted for the largest proportion of the total expense in 2008. Only 8% and 7% of the expense on Food and Luxury goods respectively. These figures reached at 17% in 2008. The largest percentage of the total expense was represented by Clothing in 1958 with 32%. However, it dropped dramatically by 20% in 2008. While the expenditure on Entertainment decreased slightly by 2% over the period of 50 years, the spending on Transport/ Travel in 2008 was a half of that in 1958, 13% compared to 6%.
The pie charts compare the expenditure on 5
different
categories: Housing, Clothing, Entertainment, Food, Travel/Sport and Luxury
goods
in a particular European nation between 1958 and 2008.

Overall
, there was an increase in the spending on Housing, Food and Luxury
goods
while those for Clothing, Entertainment and Travel/Sport decreased.

In 1958, 22% of
people
’s spending on Housing. The expenditure on Housing increased to 32%, which accounted for the largest proportion of the total expense in 2008.
Only
8% and 7% of the expense on Food and Luxury
goods
respectively
. These figures reached at 17% in 2008.

The largest percentage of the total expense
was represented
by Clothing in 1958 with 32%.
However
, it dropped
dramatically
by 20% in 2008. While the expenditure on Entertainment decreased
slightly
by 2% over the period of 50 years, the spending on Transport/ Travel in 2008 was a half of that in 1958, 13% compared to 6%.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic the charts below show the proportion of people's spending on different commodities and services in a particular European county in 1958 and in 2008 v. 1

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