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The chart shows the percentage of car manufacturer 039 s total car sales in different regions from 2006 to 2010 v.2

The chart shows the percentage of car manufacturer 039 s total car sales in different regions from 2006 to 2010 v. 2
The bar chart compares and contrasts data on the differences in the sales of automobile production in several regions worldwide, measured in proportion, over a 5-year period, starting from 2006. A closer look at the diagram highlights the fact that Asian car production gradually increased in sales, while the opposite trend is true for that of South America. Additionally, Europe and North America witnessed little variation in the total sales of car manufacture. More specifically, despite starting roughly one-third of the automobile production’s sales, the Asian figures experienced a gradual growth over the observed period, rising to half of the total sales among the other areas in 2010. However, the figure for South American nations witnessed a slight downward trend, with a rate of approximately 30% in 2006, gradually decreasing to only a tenth in five consecutive years. Looking at the chart in more detail, North America’s sales only accounted for only over 10%, which was the lowest figure among other regions in 2006. In addition, its figure declined and reached the bottom of roughly 5% in 2009, before rising back to its initial figure. On the contrary, European nations experienced a slight rise of 10% in 2008 compared to its figure in 2006, followed by marginally falling to about 30% in 2010.
The bar chart compares and contrasts data on the differences in the
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sales
of automobile production in several regions worldwide, measured in proportion, over a 5-year period, starting from 2006.

A closer look at the diagram highlights the fact that Asian car production
gradually
increased in
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sales
, while the opposite trend is true for that of South America.
Additionally
, Europe and North America witnessed
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little
variation in the total
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sales
of car manufacture.

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, despite starting roughly one-third of the automobile production’s
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sales
, the Asian
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experienced a gradual growth over the observed period, rising to half of the total
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sales
among the other areas in 2010.
However
, the
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for South American nations witnessed a slight downward trend, with a rate of approximately 30% in 2006,
gradually
decreasing to
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only
a tenth in five consecutive years.

Looking at the chart in more detail, North America’s
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sales
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accounted for
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over 10%, which was the lowest
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among other regions in 2006.
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, its
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declined and reached the bottom of roughly 5% in 2009,
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before
rising back to its initial
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.
On the contrary
, European nations experienced a slight rise of 10% in 2008 compared to its
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in 2006, followed by
marginally
falling to about 30% in 2010.
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IELTS academic The chart shows the percentage of car manufacturer 039 s total car sales in different regions from 2006 to 2010 v. 2

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