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You should spend 20 minutes on this task. The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make co v.3

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.
The line graph provided reveals the data of energy usage in the USA during the period from 1980 to 2008 and the expectation consumption from 2008 to 2030. It is evident that the energy created from fossil fuel like petrol and oil, coal and natural gas was used much more than the renewable energy like nuclear, solar/wind and hydropower. Although there was a slight fluctuation, the amount of petrol and oil using was highest during the period 1980 to 2008. The consumption of this energy is expected to raise exponentially to approximately 50 quadrillion units in 2030. The usage of coal had a gradual growth between 1980 and 2008, from nearly 16 to 20 quadrillion units and the figure will constantly increase and reach a peak of 30 in 2030. The consumption of natural gas, however, was changed considerably from 1980 to 2008 and it is predicted to raise at some where of 25 quadrillion units in 2030. In 1980, the use of alternative power like nuclear and solar/wind and hydropower was equal at 3. There was a slight rise in the consumption of nuclear while the usage of solar and hydropower remain unchanged until 2008. During the next period from 2008 to 2030, the usage of nuclear and solar/wind will follow a slight growth to 6 and 5 quadrillion units respectively while the consumption of hydropower will be unchanged.
The line graph provided reveals the data of
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energy
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usage
in the USA during the period from 1980 to 2008 and the expectation
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consumption
from 2008 to 2030.

It is evident that the
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energy
created from fossil fuel like petrol and oil, coal and natural gas was
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used
much more than the renewable
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energy
like nuclear, solar/wind and hydropower.

Although there was a slight fluctuation, the amount of petrol and oil using was highest during the period 1980 to 2008. The
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consumption
of this
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energy
is
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expected
to raise
exponentially
to approximately 50 quadrillion
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units
in 2030. The
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usage
of coal had a gradual growth between 1980 and 2008, from
nearly
16 to 20 quadrillion
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units
and the figure will
constantly
increase and reach a peak of 30 in 2030.
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The
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consumption
of natural gas,
however
, was
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changed
considerably
from 1980 to 2008 and it
is predicted
to raise at
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some where
of 25 quadrillion
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units
in 2030.

In 1980, the
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use
of alternative power like nuclear and solar/wind and hydropower was equal at 3. There was a slight rise in the
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consumption
of nuclear while the
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usage
of solar and hydropower remain unchanged until 2008. During the
next
period from 2008 to 2030, the
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usage
of nuclear and solar/wind will follow a slight growth to 6 and 5 quadrillion
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units
respectively
while the
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consumption
of hydropower will
be unchanged
.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
230 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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