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The chart shows the changes in three different areas of Manchester City Centre from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevent. v.2

The chart shows the changes in three different areas of Manchester City Centre from 2003-2012.
The line chart elucidates three different aspects of criminal activities, namely burglary, car theft, and robbery, at the Manchester City Centre over a decade, from 2003-2012. Overall, it can be construed that there has been a significant decline in the number of burglaries, whereas, when we talk about the car theft, we can see a steady increase while robbery remained the same over the period at the City Centre. As can be seen, the number of burglaries reached its peak in the year 2004 (approximately 3750) after which it experienced a telling decline over the next 4 years. The number of Car thefts remained steady until the year 2008 after which there was a continuous increase and amount reached almost 2800 at the end of the period. While the measure of robbery remained the same throughout the decade, It did experience a little growth in the year 2005 when it reached almost 900. But, at the end of the period, it again came down to the same point from where it started, i. e. 600.
The line chart elucidates three
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different
aspects of criminal activities,
namely
burglary, car theft, and robbery, at the Manchester City
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Centre
over a decade, from 2003-2012.

Overall
, it can
be construed
that there has been a significant decline in the number of burglaries, whereas, when we talk about the car theft, we can
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see
a steady increase while robbery remained the same over the period at the City
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Centre
.

As can be
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seen
, the number of burglaries reached its peak in the
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year
2004 (approximately 3750) after which it experienced a telling decline over the
next
4 years. The number of Car thefts remained steady until the
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year
2008 after which there was a continuous increase and amount reached almost 2800 at the
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end
of the period.

While the measure of robbery remained the same throughout the decade, It did experience a
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little
growth in the
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year
2005 when it reached almost 900.
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But
, at the
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end
of the period, it again came down to the same point from where it
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started
,
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i. e.
600.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The chart shows the changes in three different areas of Manchester City Centre from 2003-2012.

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4 paragraphs
175 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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