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The chart shows the amount of energy generated from wind in four countries from 1985 to 2000 v.2

The chart shows the amount of energy generated from wind in four countries from 1985 to 2000 v. 2
The bar chart illustrates the quantity of energy generated from the wind of four nations between 1985 and 2000. The data calibrated is in megawatts. Overall, it can be clearly seen that all countries amount of energy from wind had increased except the US in the last given year, although the US was the leader of generating energy among all three nations. Firstly in 1980 and 1990 India and Canada constructed a less energy as compare to other two countries, which was nearby 200 and 300 MW, but the quantity of energy production from wind India and Canada had experienced a rise of 800 and 1600 MW in 1995 and 2000, though it was not higher than the US contribution of energy from wind. Secondly, the energy generated from the wind by Germany experienced a twofold increase in 1990, but after Canada surpassed the way which Germany producing the energy at the end of the period. Apparently, the US mentioned its increasing performance until 1995 nearby 1200, 1630 and 1600 MW but in 2000 Canada beaten the performance of the US by the difference of 1050 MW in making energy from the wind.
The bar chart illustrates the quantity of
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generated from the
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wind
of four nations between 1985 and 2000. The data calibrated is in megawatts.

Overall
, it can be
clearly
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seen
that all countries amount of
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energy
from
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wind
had increased except the US in the last
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given
year, although the US was the leader of generating
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energy
among all three nations.

Firstly
in 1980 and 1990 India and Canada constructed a less
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energy
as compare to other two countries, which was nearby 200 and 300 MW,
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but
the quantity of
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energy
production from
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wind
India and Canada had experienced a rise of 800 and 1600 MW in 1995 and 2000, though it was not higher than the US contribution of
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energy
from wind.

Secondly
, the
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energy
generated from the
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wind
by Germany experienced a twofold increase in 1990,
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but
after Canada surpassed the way which Germany producing the
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energy
at the
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end
of the period.
Apparently
, the US mentioned its increasing performance until 1995 nearby 1200, 1630 and 1600 MW
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but
in 2000 Canada beaten the performance of the US by the difference of 1050 MW in making
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energy
from the
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wind
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The chart shows the amount of energy generated from wind in four countries from 1985 to 2000 v. 2

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193 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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