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The chart below shows the number of jobs in tourism related industries in one UK citiy between 1989 and 2009 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant v.2

The chart below shows the number of jobs in tourism related industries in one UK citiy between 1989 and 2009
The bar chart given compares the quantities of employment opportunities related to tourism, namely restaurants, hotels, sports and leisure, travel and tours sector in a city in the UK over the course of 20 years from 1989 to 2009. Overall, most jobs were to work in restaurants and hotels, and their number increased gradually, whereas fewer jobs in other fields were created. In 1989, about 1100 people were employed to work in restaurants and hotels. It was closely followed by sports and leisure, which had just fewer than 850000 workers. Far fewer people worked in the fields of travel and tours, just 800000 workers. From 1989 to 2004, the quantities of people in the restaurants' hotel sharply increased from 1100 to 1600, but from 2004 to 2009, this figure decreased to approximately 1580. The next popular jobs which were sport and leisure fluctuated strongly This was the same pattern with travel and tours from 1989 to 1994. The quantities of people worked in both sport and leisure and travel and tours showed a decrease similarly during the period from 1999 to 2009. The figure for sport and leisure fell to around 600 at the end, while that of travel/tours declined more significantly to just over 400.
The bar chart
given
compares the quantities of employment opportunities related to tourism,
namely
restaurants
,
hotels
,
sports
and
leisure
,
travel
and
tours
sector in a city in the UK over the course of 20 years from 1989 to 2009.

Overall
, most jobs were to work in
restaurants
and
hotels
, and their number increased
gradually
, whereas fewer jobs in other fields
were created
.

In 1989, about 1100
people
were employed
to work in
restaurants
and
hotels
. It was
closely
followed by
sports
and
leisure
, which had
just
fewer than 850000 workers. Far fewer
people
worked in the fields of
travel
and
tours
,
just
800000 workers.

From 1989 to 2004, the quantities of
people
in the
restaurants&
#039;
hotel
sharply
increased from 1100 to 1600,
but
from 2004 to 2009, this figure decreased to approximately 1580.

The
next
popular jobs which were
sport
and
leisure
fluctuated
strongly
This was the same pattern with
travel
and
tours
from 1989 to 1994. The quantities of
people
worked in both
sport
and
leisure
and
travel
and
tours
showed
a decrease
similarly
during the period from 1999 to 2009.
The
figure for
sport
and
leisure
fell to around 600 at the
end
, while that of travel/tours declined more
significantly
to
just
over 400.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the number of jobs in tourism related industries in one UK citiy between 1989 and 2009

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