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The chart below shows the changes that took places in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003 to 2012 v.2

The chart below shows the changes that took places in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003 to 2012 v. 2
The line chart illustrates data on the number of incidents made by three kinds of crime in Newport city between 2003 and 2012. Overall, the number of burglary cases in this city dropped significantly, while car theft and robbery remained relatively constant throughout 9 years. In the 2003-2006 period, although burglary experienced a sharp decline in the number of incidents, its rate always remained above the rate of other crime. Over nine years, Newport city saw a marked fall in the number of burglary with the notable exception of 2004 when it reached the highest point of the whole line graph at around 3800 incidents. After that, there was a gradual decline in the rates of burglary, which fell to the lowest point (about 1100 incidents) by the year 2008. This figure fluctuated slightly in the next 4 years before went down to almost 1500 cases in 2012. Over the same period, the rates of car theft and robbery varied less significantly than that of burglary. From 2003, car theft remained steady before reaching the bottom at about 2000 cases in 2006. The rate of this crime climbed up steeply throughout the remaining period and in 2012, it nearly owned a similar rate of crime as it used to be in 2003 (almost 3000 cases). Likewise, Newport also saw a similar figure for robbery in 2003 and 2012 (about 600 incidents). Although Robbery rate stayed unchanged in 9 years, it reached the low point of incidents at 500 cases in 2008.
The line chart illustrates data on the
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number
of
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incidents
made by three kinds of
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crime
in Newport city between 2003 and 2012.
Overall
, the
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number
of
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burglary
cases in this city dropped
significantly
, while car theft and
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robbery
remained
relatively
constant throughout 9 years.

In the 2003-2006 period, although
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burglary
experienced a sharp decline in the
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number
of
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incidents
, its
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rate
always remained above the
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rate
of other
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crime
. Over nine years, Newport city
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saw
a marked fall in the
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number
of
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burglary
with the notable exception of 2004 when it reached the highest point of the whole line graph at around 3800
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incidents
. After that, there was a gradual decline in the
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rates
of
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burglary
, which fell to the lowest point (about 1100
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incidents)
by the
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year
2008. This figure fluctuated
slightly
in the
next
4 years
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before
went down to almost 1500 cases in 2012.

Over the same period, the
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rates
of car theft and
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robbery
varied less
significantly
than that of
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burglary
. From 2003, car theft remained steady
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before
reaching the bottom at about 2000 cases in 2006. The
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rate
of this
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crime
climbed up
steeply
throughout the remaining period and in 2012, it
nearly
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owned
a similar
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rate
of
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crime
as it
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used
to be in 2003 (almost 3000 cases).
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, Newport
also
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saw
a similar figure for
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robbery
in 2003 and 2012 (about 600
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incidents)
. Although
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Robbery
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rate
stayed unchanged in 9 years, it reached the low point of
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incidents
at 500 cases in 2008.
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31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the changes that took places in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003 to 2012 v. 2

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251 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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