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The chart below shows how primary secondary and tertiary students in Britain spend their free time v.2

The chart below shows how primary secondary and tertiary students in Britain spend their free time v. 2
The bar chart illustrates the information about how pupils in three different levels of education (primary, secondary and tertiary) in the UK spend their leisure time. Overall, it is evident that majority of students spend 5 hours or more of their spare times in a week to watch television, and just a small number of them use this time to participate in extracurricular activities. Approximately 50 of senior high school student use their leisure time on three activities namely watching TV, doing homework and taking a part-time job, and just below 40 of them have extracurricular activities and browsing the internet. A large number of senior high school pupils (60 students) spend their free time watching TV, followed by doing their assignment and browsing the internet at a similar figure (40 students). Meanwhile, lower than 35 them participating in extracurricular activities and taking a job. 5 hours or more a week is used by 60 primary school students to watch TV, and around 40 students involve in extra-curricular activity and browsing the internet. just below 30 pupils prepare their school assignment and none of them is reported having a part-time job.
The bar chart illustrates the information about how pupils in three
different
levels of education (primary, secondary and tertiary) in the UK spend their leisure time.

Overall
, it is evident that majority of
students
spend 5 hours or more of their spare
times
in a week to
watch
television, and
just
a
small
number of them
use
this
time
to participate in
extracurricular
activities.

Approximately 50 of senior high
school
student
use
their leisure
time
on three
activities
namely
watching TV, doing homework and taking a part-time job, and
just
below 40 of them have
extracurricular
activities
and browsing the internet.
A large number of
senior high
school
pupils (60
students)
spend their free
time
watching TV, followed by doing their assignment and browsing the internet at a similar figure (40
students)
. Meanwhile, lower than 35 them participating in
extracurricular
activities
and taking a job.

5 hours or more a week is
used
by 60 primary
school
students
to
watch
TV, and around 40
students
involve in
extra-curricular
activity
and browsing the internet.
just
below 30 pupils prepare their
school
assignment and none of them
is reported
having a part-time job.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic The chart below shows how primary secondary and tertiary students in Britain spend their free time v. 2

Academic
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4 paragraphs
191 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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