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The chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. v.3

The chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. v. 3
The given bar chart shows the approximate world illiteracy rates by gender and region for the year 2000. As is observed in the given column graph, in all cases, the illiteracy rate among women was higher than men. Developed countries had almost ignorable illiteracy rate. On the contrary, about half of the population in South Asia, Arab states and Africa were illiterate. The illiteracy rate in Latin America / Caribbean and East Asia / Oceania was only 1 percent (approximately), 10  percent and 14 percent (approximately) respectively considering both male and female. Sub-Saharan Africa, the Arab States and South Asia had rates of approximately 40%, 41% and 45%. Illiterate women were higher than the illiterate men in all the given countries. In the developed countries, the proportion of literacy among men and female was almost similar but the differences increased for Asia, Arab states and Africa. Among the given 6 countries, the South Asian population were far more illiterate than any other country.
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the approximate world
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by gender and region for the year 2000. As
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column graph, in all cases, the
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rate
among women was higher than
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. Developed
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countries
had almost ignorable
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illiteracy
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.
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, about half of the population in South Asia, Arab states and Africa were illiterate.

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in Latin America / Caribbean and East Asia / Oceania was
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only
1 percent (approximately), 10
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percent and 14 percent (approximately)
respectively
considering both male and female. Sub-Saharan Africa, the Arab States and South Asia had
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rates
of approximately 40%, 41% and 45%. Illiterate women were higher than the illiterate
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men
in all the
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countries.

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, the proportion of literacy among
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the differences increased for Asia, Arab states and Africa. Among the
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, the South Asian population were far more illiterate than any other
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IELTS academic The chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. v. 3

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