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The chart shows the average annual pay for doctors and other workers in 7 different countries in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The chart shows the average annual pay for doctors and other workers in 7 different countries in 2004.
The presented column graph compares employees from 7 distinct nations in terms of their total salary in 2004. Overall, it is evident that doctors in all countries had a higher income than other occupations. In addition, the highest values of both counterparts were witnessed in the USA. Turning into detail, physicians and employees in other sectors in China and Canada shared the same income, with nearly 90 and about 60 thousand dollars, correspondingly. Likewise, in comparison with the aforementioned countries, Austrian workers in remaining jobs had an equal salary, whereas the figure for doctors was slightly lower, which was approximately 80 thousand dollars. Furthermore, a discernible difference between two occupation groups was also observed in Germany, in which a 110 – thousand – dollar wage for doctors was considerably bigger than that of remaining counterpart. Regarding to other countries, Japanese physicians and other workers were paid similarly, with above 40 and nearly 35 thousand dollars, respectively. These figures were faintly higher than those of correspondent employees in Czech Republic, whose income was the lowest among 7 surveyed nations. By contrast, with over 120 thousand dollars, the number for American doctors was 4 times higher than that of their Czech fellows. Meanwhile, this also resulted in a gap of 10 thousand dollars between their salary and that of labors from other sectors.
The presented column graph compares employees from 7 distinct nations in terms of their total salary in 2004.

Overall
, it is evident that
doctors
in all countries had a higher income than
other
occupations.
In addition
, the highest values of both counterparts
were witnessed
in the USA.

Turning into detail, physicians and employees in
other
sectors in China and Canada shared the same income, with
nearly
90 and about 60 thousand
dollars
,
correspondingly
.
Likewise
,
in comparison
with the aforementioned countries, Austrian workers in remaining jobs had an equal salary, whereas the figure for
doctors
was
slightly
lower, which was approximately 80 thousand
dollars
.
Furthermore
, a discernible difference between two occupation groups was
also
observed in Germany, in which a 110
thousand
dollar
wage for
doctors
was
considerably
bigger than that of remaining counterpart.

Regarding to
other
countries, Japanese physicians and
other
workers
were paid
similarly
, with above 40 and
nearly
35 thousand
dollars
,
respectively
. These figures were
faintly
higher than those of correspondent employees
in Czech Republic
, whose income was the lowest among 7 surveyed nations. By contrast, with over 120 thousand
dollars
, the number for American
doctors
was 4 times higher than that of their Czech fellows. Meanwhile, this
also
resulted in a gap of 10 thousand
dollars
between their salary and that of labors from
other
sectors.
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15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS academic The chart shows the average annual pay for doctors and other workers in 7 different countries in 2004.

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