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The graph shows the spending on medical care, education, pension of a particular country from 2001 to 2051. summarise the information by selecting and reporting main feature and make comparison where relevant. v.2

The graph shows the spending on medical care, education, pension of a particular country from 2001 to 2051.
The provided lime graph illustrations the information about expenditure of country on pension, education, medical care until 2001 with future prediction up-to 2051. Overall, it is clear that spending of a nation on these selected areas remained constant till 2011 with exception of minor dip in education cost. However, it is expected That there will be incline in pension spending and cost of medical care will follow opposite trend. To begin with, 16% of the budget was spent by government on education during 2001; whereas, spending on medical care and pension was nearby 6% and 11% respectively. The spending on three areas remained fix till 2011 and it is projected to be same in next decade. surprisingly, estimates show that after 2021 spending on pension will increase sharply and reach at under a fifth. In contrast, in upcoming years the spending on medical care will decreased drastically and remained only 2%. Probing further, in education spending, estimates depict a small dip after 2021 and then will remain unchanged by 2051. It is interesting to note that country' s spending on pension and medical care will be equal (8%) between 2021 and 2031. Controversialy, pension cost will be at top level by 2051.
The provided lime graph illustrations the information about expenditure of country on
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until 2001 with future prediction up-to 2051.

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spending
of a nation on these selected areas remained constant till 2011 with
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exception of
minor dip in
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education
cost.
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, it is
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expected
That there will be
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pension
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spending
and cost of
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medical
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care
will follow opposite trend.

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begin
with, 16% of the budget
was spent
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government
on
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education
during 2001; whereas,
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spending
on
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medical
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care
and
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pension
was nearby 6% and 11%
respectively
. The
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spending
on three areas remained
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fix
till 2011 and it
is projected
to be same in
next
decade.
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surprisingly
, estimates
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that after 2021
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spending
on
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pension
will increase
sharply
and reach at under a fifth.
In contrast
, in upcoming years the
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spending
on
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medical
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care
will decreased
drastically
and remained
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only
2%.

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further
, in
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education
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spending
, estimates depict a
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small
dip after 2021 and then will remain unchanged by 2051. It is interesting to note that
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spending
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and
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medical
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care
will be equal (8%) between 2021 and 2031.
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Controversialy
,
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pension
cost will be at
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top level
by 2051.
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28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The graph shows the spending on medical care, education, pension of a particular country from 2001 to 2051.

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4 paragraphs
202 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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