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The chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000, 2016, and future projections for 2025. v.2

The chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000, 2016, and future projections for 2025. v. 2
Rendered on a bar graph is information regarding the total value of Southland’s three primary exports in 2000, 2016, and future predictions for the year of 2025. A pattern plainly in evidence is that international tourism will become noticeably more dominant than the other two types of export industry. Among the three export sectors, international tourism and dairy products have experienced the upward trend, albeit by varying degrees. In 2000, tourism contributed the greatest amount of money to Southland’s exports, with a figure standing at over £8 billion. Then, the value has increased steadily, reaching approximately £9 billion at the end of 2016. It is forecasted that international tourism will consistently escalate to around £10 billion by 2025. The export data of dairy goods has played out differently, where the revenue is predicted to fall slightly to £9. 5 billion in the next 10 years after a dramatic rise by £3 billion between 2000 and 2016. A contrasting pattern took shape in meat exports due to the fact that the sales of exporting meat has witnessed the gradual downturn in the given period. Specifically, meat products’ revenues stood at £6 billion in the millennium, followed by a steady decline to £5. 5 billion over 16 years. Also, it is expected that sales will continue to go down in the following years, which accounts for the least earnings in Southland’s key exports. Overall, it is abundantly clear that international tourism and dairy exports will constantly maintain the major positions in export industry, while meat counterparts will demonstrate a downward trend in the future.
Rendered on a bar graph is information regarding the total value of Southland’s three primary
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exports
in 2000, 2016, and future predictions for the
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year
of 2025. A pattern
plainly
in evidence is that
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international
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tourism
will become
noticeably
more dominant than the other two types of
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export
industry.

Among the three
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export
sectors,
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international
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tourism
and dairy products have experienced the upward trend, albeit by varying degrees. In 2000,
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tourism
contributed the greatest amount of money to Southland’s
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exports
, with a figure standing at over £8
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billion
. Then, the value has increased
steadily
, reaching approximately £9
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billion
at the
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end
of 2016. It
is forecasted
that
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international
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tourism
will
consistently
escalate to around £10
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billion
by 2025. The
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export
data of dairy
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goods
has played out
differently
, where the revenue
is predicted
to fall
slightly
to £9. 5
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billion
in the
next
10 years after a dramatic rise by £3
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billion
between 2000 and 2016.

A contrasting pattern took shape in
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meat
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exports
due to the fact that the sales of exporting
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meat
has witnessed the gradual downturn in the
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given
period.
Specifically
,
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meat
products’ revenues stood at £6
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billion
in the millennium, followed by a steady decline to £5. 5
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billion
over 16 years.
Also
, it is
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expected
that sales will continue to go down in the following years, which accounts for the least earnings in Southland’s key exports.

Overall
, it is
abundantly
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clear
that
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international
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tourism
and dairy
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exports
will
constantly
maintain the major positions in
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export
industry, while
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meat
counterparts will demonstrate a downward trend in the future.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000, 2016, and future projections for 2025. v. 2

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