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The following pie charts show the results of a survey into the most popular leisure activities in the United States of America in 1999 and 2009. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The following pie charts show the results of a survey into the most popular leisure activities in the United States of America in 1999 and 2009.
The charts compare eight different pastimes in the USA in two seperate year 1999 and 2009. It is clear from the graphs that walking by far was the most widely enjoyed activity by Americans. Additionally, swimming and aerobics witnessed the most dramatic changes during the research period. In 1999, almost 30% of those surveyed participated in walking during their free time, followed by 17% of America people enjoyed soccer. Meanwhile, the figures for swimming, camping and jogging were relatively lower, at 9%, 8% and 7% respectively. By contrast, it can be seen that not many people living in the USA interested in yoga, at only 5%. In 2009, the proportion of people walking in their free time had a slight increase to 31%. Likewise, the percentage of people played soccer had a 1% rise to 18%. However, the figures for swimming and aerobics experienced the most significant changes. While the swimming proportion doubled to 18%, the percentage of people took part in aerobics declined to only 4% in 2009.
The charts compare eight
different
pastimes in the USA in two
seperate
year 1999 and 2009.

It is
clear
from the graphs that walking by far was the most
widely
enjoyed activity by Americans.
Additionally
, swimming and aerobics witnessed the most dramatic
changes
during the research period.

In 1999, almost 30% of those surveyed participated in walking during their free time, followed by 17% of America
people
enjoyed soccer. Meanwhile, the figures for swimming, camping and jogging were
relatively
lower, at 9%, 8% and 7%
respectively
. By contrast, it can be
seen
that not
many
people
living in the USA interested in yoga, at
only
5%.

In 2009, the proportion of
people
walking in their free time had a slight increase to 31%.
Likewise
, the percentage of
people
played soccer had a 1% rise to 18%.
However
, the figures for swimming and aerobics experienced the most significant
changes
. While the swimming proportion doubled to 18%, the percentage of
people
took part
in aerobics declined to
only
4% in 2009.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The following pie charts show the results of a survey into the most popular leisure activities in the United States of America in 1999 and 2009.

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4 paragraphs
169 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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