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The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001. v.4

The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001. v. 4
The bar graph outlines the average duration a teacher spent on three different levels in four different countries in 2001. Overall, the teaching hours at the secondary level was higher than that of primary level and the US tutors spent more time teaching than the teachers in the other three countries did. A US teacher spent more than 700 hours to teach primary students in 2001 while a Japanese educator disbursed exactly 600 hours for teaching the same graders. Time allocated to teaching elementary student by a Spanish teacher was 50 hours higher than that of Japanese teacher but it was less than 600 hours in Iceland. An American teacher’s average schooling duration in 2001 for lower secondary students was 1000 hours which was 300 to 400 hours higher than the teaching duration by a teacher in the other three countries. Finally, higher secondary students received almost 1200 hours’ lectures by a teacher in the US and this duration was noticeable higher than of other countries. In Japan, an upper secondary level teacher taught for 700 hours in 2001, almost 500 hours less than that of a US teacher. In Iceland and Spain, teaching duration by a higher secondary level teacher was approximately 900 hours, about 300 hours less than that of an American teacher.
The bar graph outlines the average
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spent on three
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in four
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in 2001.
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secondary
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was higher than that of primary
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and the US tutors spent more time
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did.

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spent more than 700
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to teach primary
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in 2001 while a Japanese educator disbursed exactly 600
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the same graders. Time allocated to
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elementary
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by a Spanish
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was 50
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in Iceland. An American
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average schooling
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in 2001 for lower
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which was 300 to 400
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received almost 1200
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lectures by a
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in the US and this
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was noticeable higher than of other
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taught for 700
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in 2001, almost 500
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less than that of a US
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. In Iceland and Spain,
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was approximately 900
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, about 300
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less than that of an American
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IELTS academic The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001. v. 4

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