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The bar charts below provide information about percentages of students who are proficient in a foreign language in different countries. v.1

The bar charts below provide information about percentages of students who are proficient in a foreign language in different countries. v. 1
The bar chart presents the ratio of male and female pupils in six countries who have good commands in a foreign language. It is obvious that more percentages of female learners are proficient in a second language than that of male pupils and the proportion of such fluent students is higher in India and Romania. As the diagram summarise, the quotient of students versed in a foreign language was the highest in India, approximately 68% female students and 56% male students with the ability to use a second language. Romania has approximately 65% women pupils and just over 40% male students who are expert in a different language. Interestingly, the rate of students with skill in a foreign language is higher among females than that of males in all countries except in Thailand where such male pupils’ ratio is 30%. Vietnam has more ratio of second-language-knowing students than that of China, and Russia. The lowest percentages of such pupils reside in China where only around 20-30% disciples know a second dialect.
The bar chart presents the ratio of male and
female
pupils
in six countries who have
good
commands in a foreign
language
. It is obvious that more percentages of
female
learners are proficient in a second
language
than that of male
pupils
and the proportion of such fluent
students
is higher in India and Romania.

As the diagram
summarise
, the quotient of
students
versed in a foreign
language
was the highest in India, approximately 68%
female
students
and 56% male
students
with the ability to
use
a second
language
. Romania has approximately 65% women
pupils
and
just
over 40% male
students
who are expert in a
different
language
.
Interestingly
, the rate of
students
with
skill
in a foreign
language
is higher among
females
than that of
males
in all countries except in Thailand where such male
pupils’
ratio is 30%. Vietnam has more ratio of second-language-knowing
students
than that of China, and Russia. The lowest percentages of such
pupils
reside in China where
only
around 20-30% disciples know a second dialect.
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The bar charts below provide information about percentages of students who are proficient in a foreign language in different countries. v. 1

Academic
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171 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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