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The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons.
The bar chart shows three teams’ (A, B, C) scores over four consecutive seasons from 2002 to 2005. One profound observation is team B’s dominating performance throughout the years with its scores far exceeding those of the other two teams. Starting off from its peak at 82 points in 2002, team B then lost more than 20 points in the next season and plunged to its record low at 43 points in 2004 before making a recovery in the final season of 2005, finishing at 55 points. An interesting contrast can be seen in team A’s performance. Despite a very modest start with only 5 points, team A doubled its score in the next season before striking the most impressive performance boost in 2004 when it chased closely after the top scorer. However, team A failed to maintain its heights as it scored only 8 points in the final season. Team C experienced some inconsistency in its performance over the years. Its scores fluctuated around 12 points over the first three seasons before plummeting to its rock bottom with only 5 points in 2005.
The bar chart
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three
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(A, B, C)
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over four consecutive
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from 2002 to 2005.

One profound observation is
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B’s dominating
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performance
throughout the years with its
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far exceeding those of the other two
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teams
. Starting off from its peak at 82
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in 2002,
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B then lost more than 20
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in the
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and plunged to its record low at 43
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in 2004
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making a recovery in the final
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season
of 2005, finishing at 55 points.

An interesting contrast can be
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A’s
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. Despite a
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modest
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5
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,
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A


doubled its
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in the
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before
striking the most impressive
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boost in 2004 when it

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chased
closely
after the top scorer.
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,
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A failed to maintain its heights as it scored
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8
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points
in the

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final
season.

Team C experienced
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inconsistency in its
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over the years. Its
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scores
fluctuated around 12
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points


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over
the
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three
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seasons
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plummeting to its rock bottom with
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5
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in 2005.
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IELTS academic The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons.

Academic
  American English
8 paragraphs
184 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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