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The bar chart below shows the number of students in three different courses from 2001-2004. Identify the main trends and summarize the data v.2

The bar chart below shows the number of students in three different courses from 2001-2004. Identify the main trends and
The bar chart illustrated the amount of the student’s presence in three main courses between 2001 and 2004. It is clear that students attended in course C increasing little by little. Meanwhile, course B was subject to overall volatility over four years. In the first two years, the quantity of students was in course A was likely to decrease from 4, 3 millions to 2, 5 millions. After a slight lull, the number of students in course A tended to increase to 4. 5 millions in two year’s time. Meanwhile, there was a fluctuation in the amount of the attenders in course B and finally stood at nearly 3 millions in 2004. There was a period of stability in the figure for course C, at 2 millions in 2001 and 2002. After two years, the students were in course C saw increase to the highest point, at 5 millions in 2004.
The bar chart illustrated the amount of the
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presence in three main
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courses
between 2001 and 2004.

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that
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students
attended in
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course
C increasing
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little
by
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little
. Meanwhile,
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course
B was subject to
overall
volatility over four years.

In the
first
two years, the quantity of
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students
was in
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course
A was likely to decrease from 4, 3
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millions
to 2, 5
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millions
. After a slight lull, the number of
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students
in
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course
A tended to increase to 4. 5
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millions
in two year’s time. Meanwhile, there was a fluctuation in the amount of the attenders in
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course
B and
finally
stood at
nearly
3
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millions
in 2004.

There was a period of stability in the figure for
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course
C, at 2
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millions
in 2001 and 2002. After two years, the
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students
were in
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course
C
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saw
increase to the highest point, at 5
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millions
in 2004.
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the number of students in three different courses from 2001-2004. Identify the main trends and

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4 paragraphs
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6.5
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