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The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or expe v.28

The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. with this statement? 28
These days, there has been an increase in the quality of living condition within the society and there are those who say that health among the individuals is greater in the upcoming years than it is today. However, I predominantly disagree as the health standard is predetermined according to the ongoing crisis in the world. It is explicably true that more people are being more conscious now and it was before. This is due to the ill-effects that they see as a threat due to their poor habits and that with them subscribing to certain lifestyle modifications. As such, fitness enthusiasts have subscribed themselves to regular exercise, proper diet with organic foods and daily consultations with there attending physicians which they see as a good investment to achieve optimum level of health and wellness. However, with the current situation in the world, people are more exposed to environmental hazard. The ongoing pollution has given enough space for carbon excess to be stored within the atmosphere thus, aggravates global warming. Recently, wildfires have spread in most of the regions in the amazon rainforest due to the increasing temperature of the planet which has caused global hiatus as it further endangers the ecosystem as a whole. Furthermore, a variety of infectious diseases have been found to be difficult to treat due to the increased level of immunity by many infections to antibiotic therapy. The development of multiple drug resistant bacterias have made first generation antibacterial medicines to be ineffective. As a result, more and more people are becoming prone to these communicable infections which can certainly affect those who are less fortunate and cannot afford treatment. As a whole, although there are some who are of the belief that the health standard is greater than it is now, I am of the view that it is going to more of the opposite. Even if they are conscious about their body, biomedical and environmental hazards will continue to pose as threats to humanity.
These days, there has been an increase in the quality of living condition within the society and there are those who say that
health
among the individuals is greater in the upcoming years than it is
today
.
However
, I
predominantly
disagree as the
health
standard
is predetermined
according to the ongoing crisis in the world.

It is
explicably
true that more
people
are being more conscious
now
and it was
before
. This is
due
to the ill-effects that they
see
as a threat
due
to their poor habits and that with them subscribing to certain lifestyle modifications. As such, fitness enthusiasts have subscribed themselves to regular exercise, proper diet with organic foods and daily consultations with
there
attending physicians which they
see
as a
good
investment to achieve optimum level of
health
and wellness.

However
, with the
current
situation in the world,
people
are more exposed to environmental hazard. The ongoing pollution has
given
enough
space for carbon excess to
be stored
within the atmosphere
thus
, aggravates global warming. Recently, wildfires have spread in most of the regions in the
amazon
rainforest
due
to the increasing temperature of the planet which has caused global hiatus as it
further
endangers the ecosystem as a whole.

Furthermore
, a variety of infectious diseases have
been found
to be difficult to treat
due
to the increased level of immunity by
many
infections to antibiotic therapy. The development of multiple drug resistant
bacterias have
made
first
generation antibacterial medicines to be ineffective.
As a result
, more and more
people
are becoming prone to these communicable infections which can
certainly
affect those who are less fortunate and cannot afford treatment.

As a whole, although there are
some
who are of the belief that the
health
standard is greater than it is
now
, I am of the view that it is going to
more
of the opposite. Even if they are conscious about their body, biomedical and environmental hazards will continue to pose as threats to humanity.
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IELTS academic The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. with this statement? 28

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330 words
5.5
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